No Such thing As Immortality Review

3 out of 5 stars

SPOILER WARNING

Choc Lit – whom I love – sent me the link to the free book, publicising it as a good fix for those of us still suffering from Twilight withdrawal.  Well, I was hooked, as would any Twilight fan be.  I can see why they make this claim as the writing is very similar, particularly the depths to which the author delves to explain the hero’s perspective. (Hero POV).  Unfortunately, and I cannot tell if this is due to editorial cutting or the author’s decision, there are too many ‘just there’ moments.  There is too little build up to significant events/emotions/decisions and too much build up in other places.
I do not see the point of Madeleine – she gives no additional insight to any of the characters psyche, unless her purpose is to be an information tool, but even that felt unnecessary as any of the other characters could have provided that.
The flashback to explain the current circumstances was so far into the book it was unnecessary – we’d managed to piece it all together by then and the regression just felt like we were being the same thing all over again.
Several times it took me a few sentences to work out what was going on  – the first time this happened was at the very start of the book!  I couldn’t work out the scene at all and it took a few reads to ascertain that the hero is racing his souped up car against his friend’s – with their lights off (why?).  Why exactly did he crash into her – something that I would have expected him to focus on more.  Does he have super-keen reflexes and would have expected to automatically avoid her?  I’m still very confused about the whole scene.
Also, how old is the heroine?  I originally thought she was in her early twenties, then, after calculating her relation ship with Jordan thought mid-twenties.  But, later we are told the incident involving Seth was 29 years ago – so she’s in her thirties?  And she’s been with the current architectural firm…I gave up.
I like the idea of the book.  I’m intrigued by the concept of a faerie/vampire relationship, but I wish there were more clues about the nature of the heroine (and I don’t mean the vague refusal to mention anything by Aunt Hetty/Heather).
That was another thing.  The nickname/full name consistency.  The book is from his POV, and either he calls his brother-in-law Freddy or Frederick.  Stick with one, please, and after 200 years surely his whole ‘coven’ should be using the same nicknames? (This was my daughter’s biggest bug bear and she insists there were too many nickname/full name combos).
So – Twilightesque? Vampires – tick.  Emotionally intense – tick. Insta-attraction – tick. Wanting to kill on sight – tick.  Someone wanting to kill her and he has to prevent it – tick.  She is his life, etc – tick.
Yet…I’m not gasping for #2.  Please, Ms Tranter, it is a wonderful storyline.  Get a better editor and some enthusiastic beta-readers who aren’t afraid to pull it to bits.

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About Bea Turvey apprentice author and witch

I am a wild-haired author who cannot stop writing. The writing process is not a task for me. It is an extension of myself. When I write, I lose myself as easily as if I slipped into the story for a swim. Writing became a serious part of my life in Decmber of 2009. Unless you're reading this in 2017 it wasn't that long ago, and the bug hit me hard and fast. My first novel, Banished, was published in March 2010 and is available at http://www.amazon.co.uk/Banished-ebook/dp/B008PGM4TQ/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&qid=1361913026&sr=8-1. If you read it, or anything else I've written, I hope you'll post a review and let me know why you liked it - or even why not!
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